The edited story is attached. As the original story
was autobiographical and I was adding in fictional
elements, I made the following changes:
- Renamed the protagonists to Joe and Susan
- Retitled it to "Playing Rough"
- Dropped all references to anal play
- Added a light pussy caning scene
It is possible that they will ask for more edits or reject it now if they don't like the changes. But, I'm satisfied now.